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Posted on December 15, 2010 at 11:20 PM

I am still here even though I’m gone

I am in the wind that blows,

I am the thorn and the vine

that protects the rose.

 

Though I cannot speak I can relay

A message to the mind,

Because the spirit has the power

To reach out and to find.

 

I’m all around and everywhere

I exist and then again I don’t,

Don’t ever think that I will leave

Because my love, I won’t.

 

I’m still here but I cannot touch

But you feel me anyway,

I’ll be with you all through the night

And also everyday.

 

I am still here even though I’m gone

But gone is but a phrase,

When you dream you dream of us

And all our glory days.

 

I’m of an existence secret to life

That only the passed may know,

But the blessing that I’m bestowed

Is I still get to love you so.

Categories: Poetry & Lyric, El Roi' Jackson

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1 Comment

Reply Christopher Law
6:43 PM on December 16, 2010 
I mostly like this, although I think it could do with a little tweaking. Most of that is me thinking how I'd have phrased lines and is just a question of style - not that mine is so great or anything.

I would change the line 'But gone is but a phase' to 'But gone is just a phase' because the repetition of 'but' is a little clunky and I'm guessing 'That only the passed my know' is missing a letter!

Minor complaints aside, however, this was a good read, nicely structured with some good, strong images.